Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts

Monday, December 17, 2012

Twelve Somethings of Co-Op

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....A Party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Eight days till Christmas,
seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Nine plates of cookies,
eight days till Christmas,
seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!

O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Ten teacher presents,
nine plates of cookies,
eight days till Christmas,
seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!


O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Eleven billion raindrops,
ten teacher presents,
nine plates of cookies,
eight days till Christmas,
seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!



O We're halfway through co-op and t'day there's gonna be....

.....Twelve Praise Team dancers,
eleven billion raindrops,
ten teacher presents,
nine plates of cookies,
eight days till Christmas,
seven forgotten jackets,
six weeks of vacation,
FIVE TRIPS TO TARGET!!!!
four caroling classes,
three great soups,
two awesome leaders,
and a  party at the Learning Tree!




Friday, October 26, 2012

Gwilminawyn, conclusion

to read from the beginning, click here

Evelyn had chosen the sword. Gwilminawyn wished Evelyn had confided in her more. Did she leave to search out her roots? To avenge her family’s death? To simply live among the humans for a while?
What had happened to Evelyn?

There were no answers yet.  Should Gwilminawyn wait for answers? If she was a leaf, or if she was a fish, should she stay in the pool formed at the base of the rock, waiting for answers?

Gwilminawyn contemplated this option, closing her eyes and imagining her life. She would stand up from here, walk back to her home, climb back up the vine and slip into her house unseen. She would sleep and eat, and wake, and go through the rest of the grieving with her parents. There would be songs, music, candles placed along the garden wall, lanterns hung in the trees around her home and around the homes of her neighbors. There would be gatherings, eulogies, memorials attended together.

And then life would go on. Slowly at first, but certainly. Eventually Gwilminawyn would be back at her studies. In a couple of decades or so her parents would be speaking to her about apprenticing, if she knew what she wanted to pursue. Or, if not, they would be speaking to her about spending some years in sampling…rotating through mentors till she found a path that fit her.

Maybe somewhere during that span her uncle would leave, would travel, would find and bring back answers about Evelyn. Maybe.

Gwilminawyn opened her eyes.

One thing she knew now. She did not want her life to go on as if Evelyn had never existed. Surely Evelyn’s life had meant something. Had mattered.

Gwilminawyn couldn’t avenge Evelyn’s death, but surely Evelyn’s life had been more than just a wind through the pines. 

She wrapped her fingers around the hilt of the foil.

 Against whom would she wield a sword? Against orcs for causing the destruction of Evelyn’s first home and first family? Orcs might make a fine target for her anger and her grief. It would be easy to hate them.

But it wouldn’t bring meaning to Evelyn’s life.  And, even as she thought about taking up a sword, training to track and kill orcs, Gwilminawyn knew that wasn’t who she wanted to become…some anger filled slayer. Gwilminawyn, raised in a peaceful home surrounded by beautiful garden and filled with music and love, didn’t want to be so cold, so bitter. “Unforgiveness,” her father had said, “is like taking poison daily and then expecting some other person to suffer its effects.”

Not an orc hunter then.

If not that, then what?

It was not fair, not just, that Evelyn should have lost so much. It was not right that Evelyn’s village was just one of many to fall to flames and violence. That Evelyn, vibrant, brilliant Evelyn should have lived so short a time before she was snuffed out.

Gwilminawyn stood, foil in hand.

Suddenly she knew what she wanted.

Nothing she could do would bring Evelyn back. Not now, not ever. And nothing she could do would make Evelyn’s death right.  She couldn’t change what had happened to Evelyn, but she could step in, and keep it from happening to someone else. Not as a ruthless hunter, or a cold-hearted slayer, but she could step in as a Protector.

She smiled, savoring the word again in her mind, Protector.

The foil felt right in her hand.

A sword for the hand, a goal for the heart….that took care of two of the three realms of being, body and spirit. Now, for the mind, for the intellect…

Gwilminawyn let out an audible gasp as the last piece slid into place. Arcana for the mind. Body, mind, and spirit, she knew what she wanted to become. The realization sent a shiver of excitement over her.

Grinning, she jumped off the rock, landing with a less than graceful splat in the mud on the far side of the small pool. She rubbed her soiled hands and the edge of the foil along a nearby clump of moss to remove the biggest part of dirt. Even a botched landing didn’t serve to damper her enthusiasm.  Her foot and handprints in the silt at the edge of the pool still left a smooth unmarred stretch of mud, and that was what Gwilminawyn needed.

The foil tip was capped with a round knob, making it less than ideal as a stylus. But Gwilminawyn dug it through the soft clay anyway.  It left no graceful elven script in its wake, but fat furrows punctuated with clumps of mud.  Intent on her purpose, Gwilminawyn gripped the foil with both hands, her right around its hilt and her left curved around the blade just below the guard. Letter after chunky letter she carved into the ground.

A few moments later, she stood surveying her handiwork. The thick pine forest filtered out most of the moonlight, so that even her elven eyes had to strain to see. Her bare toes were nearly numb with cold and her shivering now was not out of excitement alone. She’d be running home, cold, wet, and muddy. But the word she stood looking at now, that one word made everything else seem insignificant.

Tomorrow, she decided, she would come and line each letter with flower petals. But now she began slowly, carefully picking her way across the dark rocks, heading for the path that would lead her home.

Behind her, the night would keep her writing hidden for hours. Unseen in the dark, cold mud was one single word of hope.

Bladesinger.


Gwilminawyn, pt 3

Click here  to read this short story from the beginning.

*****

 “One…two…three…four…five…seven…”

“Six,” corrected Gwilminawyn.

“One….two….three…four…five….seven….six…”

Gwilminawyn laid the stylus beside the wax tablet and leaned under the writing desk.

“One…two….three….four….five….six….seven….eight,” she said, tapping on each white buttons in the row as she helped Evelyn count. “Now, can you count the metal buttons?”

While Evelyn’s fingers worked on finding and lining up the four metal buttons, Gwilminawyn picked up her stylus and went back to her copy work.

*****

Hand in hand the two girls skipped down the path. The late afternoon sun slanted through the boughs of the pines.  Though of a similar size and statue, the two looked like spirits of two opposing elements as they flashed between sun and shadow.  Sunlight turned Gwilminawyn’s long elven hair silver, and in the shade it took on a ghostly sheen.  Next to her, Evelyn’s riotous curls became a flaming corona as she bounced along, and then just as quickly a burnished cloud.

*****

 “Hold still, Gwilminawyn. I swear, I should go back to calling you ‘Minnow’ the way you’re wiggling around today!”

“Not fair, Evelyn. I only want to see!”

“When I’m finished. What happened to this famous elven patience I keep hearing about?”

Gwilminawyn took a deep breath. “That,” she said, “was a low blow. But fine, fine, I am being patient!”

“I’m nearly finished anyway.”

Gwilminawyn watched the last of the aster flowers traveling from the bowl near Evelyn’s hand. She felt another pin slide into place in her hair.

“There. Now, you can look.”

Gwilminawyn stood from the chair and turned around to see herself in the mirror. Cool pink and lavender blooms formed a wreath around the crown of her head.  Below the blossoms, fine silver braids hung in delicate loops. Under all this, the rest of her hair hung like a sheen of silk around her back and shoulders. “Oh Evelyn. Thank you. Thank you, it’s beautiful.”

“Well,” said the taller teen with a smile, “you only turn one hundred once. Happy Birthday, dear sister.”

*****

Gwilminawyn pulled herself back to the present. She could not bear to relive Evelyn’s leave taking. The earnest discussions to try to convince the brash young woman to wait. The concern on her uncle’s and parents’ faces. Evelyn’s insistence on traveling alone, without the man she had come to call father. Gwilminawyn sitting at one of the lookout posts, staring at the empty road long after Evelyn had walked out of sight. The sentry gently suggesting Gwilminawyn go home after the last rays of the sun had faded.

Knowing she was close to reckless sobbing, Gwilminawyn stood to take her leave. She wiped her hand over her tear streaked cheeks, a motion that was quickly followed by her mother’s hand caressing the young elf’s face. On other days, Gwilminawyn might have resented being treated as a child. But today she was content to accept the comfort in the familiar gestures of having her face wiped, a loose strand of hair swept back and tucked behind a pointed ear, a kiss bestowed on her forehead.

Her father, she noticed, was sitting with his eyes shut and his fingers twitching rhythmically against each other. Gwilminawyn lips curved to a smile. Surely her father, Master Harpist, was translating his memories into a beautiful melody, a musical eulogy for Evelyn.

Gwilminawyn, on tip toe, kissed her mother’s cheek before mustering the courage to turn to her uncle. She was relieved to see he had slipped into his own reverie. She did not think she could face him, not yet.

Silently, she slipped from the room. The adults would keep their vigil long into the night, she was sure, but youth excused Gwilminawen.

She slipped up the tight spiral stairwell and into her bedroom upstairs. Opening her wardrobe and moving her dresses aside, she pulled out Evelyn’s going away present to her.  Unthinking, Gwilminawen had begged Evelyn to wait to leave until Gwilminawen was old enough for them to go together. Evelyn had laughed and reminded the young elf that she would be an old woman by the time her favorite “Glowworm” would be old enough to leave home. Instead, she had left Gwilminawen her practice foil, promising that Gwilminawen’s time to travel would come.
It was this foil that the young elf now held, Evelyn’s parting gift. The metal was cheap, a dull ugly grey next to Gwilminawen’s own pale skin. The end was knobbed, and the long ‘blade’ itself was rounded and would never hold an edge. Still, it was well made and well balanced, even counterweighted to compensate for the cap on its tip.

For one brief moment, Gwilminawen’s blood rushed and her anger pooled. She stood in her room heart racing, considering swearing a blood oath of vengeance. But vengeance on whom, exactly? All they knew of Evelyn’s death was simply that the wards the elves had secretly placed on the bold young woman had been triggered. The spell returned to her uncle with the information that Evelyn’s life had been extinguished. The where, the how, the why….all of those questions were of yet unanswered. So against who or what could Gwilminawen direct her anger?

Gradually her pulse slowed. Her rage dissolved into weeping that refused to be held in check any longer. When she had finally exhausted her store of tears, her room and fallen into the shadow of evening.

Without really knowing why, Gwilminawen took the foil and headed out to the small balcony off her parents’ bedroom. Slipping the foil’s strap over her shoulder, the girl climbed over the banister and shimmed down the thick vine clinging to the side of the circular home.  It wasn’t her intention to sneak out necessarily, but only to spare her mother more worry. She told herself that going out through the downstairs doors would bring questions and disturb the hushed vigil. Once outside, she kept well away from the arched windows of the front room, leaving her mother’s well designed garden through its back gate.

Elven dwellings are often widely spaced and at this time of day, with most families at dinner, Gwilminawen met no one else as she made her way along the paths. Belatedly she wished she would have thought to slip her feet into some coverings since the fallen pine needles along the paths were prickly.  She was not usually so careless.

Soon enough, the soft dirt path gave way to a simple flagstone walk, which in turn became proper stone as it wound nearer to the edge of one of the many cliff-like ravines that formed the landscape of her home.  Down she walked, disappearing into a crevice in the rock. Smooth steps had been carved into the stone and rock walls rose to either side of her. Along her right, rough tree roots twisted and turned where they were ever working to pry the stone farther apart. Along her left, elven script carved in raised relief harmonized with the sinuous roots opposite. When she was younger, she had loved to run her hands along roots and script alike. But, now that she was older, she knew that each contact with the carvings, however miniscule, hastened their ultimate removal.  She let her eyes delight in the texture instead of her fingers.

The end of the staircase opened onto a natural promontory near the top half of a massive, water carved hollow in the cliff face. Below and to her left, the hollow formed many wide deep shelves, all covered with a carpet of green moss, draped with delicate ferns, and rimmed with low walls so skillfully constructed they blended seamlessly into the vista. It was here where the elves gathered to pray and to offer songs of thanksgiving. Gwilminawyn remembered her uncle explaining that humans sometimes mistook elves worshipping in spots of natural beauty with elves worshipping the natural world. Whereas Gwilminawyn knew the truth was that elves choose to pay homage to the Creator in places where His artistry and masterwork were most prevalent.

Gwilminawyn turned to her right and began descending down a path which hugged the wall of the outer cliff. Soon enough, the path turned back on itself and, still descending, headed toward a gracefully arched bridge that crossed the space between the two arms of the cavern.  As it joined with the bridge, the path widened and passed around both sides of a large stone. The top of the stone was flat save for a perfectly round bowl which the elves kept full of fresh water, even in the driest months of summer. Gwilminawyn paused here, dutifully checking the level of the water. In the center of the tiny pool someone had floated a perfect circle of narrow yellow leaves, connecting them stem to tip, stem to tip, one to the other. Gwilminawyn inspected the leaves as well, ensuring that none were so waterlogged as to be in danger of sinking and disrupting the circle. The neverending circle represented the Eternal and three connected circles, the Eternal Three-In-One. Gwilminawyn smiled, pleased that she had, after years of puzzling, been able to find the other two circles present here.
Across the bridge, she took another flight of steps down to the very bottom of the ravine. It had been a several weeks since the last decent rainstorm. In the spring, a waterfall spilled over the edge of the cliff high above in several shimmering strands. Now, in early autumn, it had dwindled to a few glistening drops seeping from the rock. The streambed, where Gwilminawyn now stood, had dried and left behind many elongated ponds.

Gwilminawyn picked her way across the rocks with ease. The evening cast the ravine into deep shadows, but like a cat, Gwilminawyn’s silver eyes reflected the lingering light. She stopped at the object of her journey, a large wedge shaped stone which perfectly split the mountain stream, forcing the water  to run to either side of it. Now, a pool formed in front of the stone, and only a trickle of water dribbled to either side.

It was a good place to come to make a decision. Gwilminawyn had last been here with her mother who had explained, “As the waters split before the stone so too where there will be times in life when the flow of our lives hits an obstacle. We will have a choice of paths to carry us beyond the obstacle. We also choose in what manner we move beyond the obstacle. We can be like a leaf and just be swept along with the current, or we can be like the swimming fish who navigate the stream.”

Gwilminawyn sat cross-legged on the stone with Evelyn’s foil across her knees. She felt like a leaf, spinning out of control in a current she was powerless to change. She had crashed hard against a cold, unyielding rock. But she did not want to be swept away. How could she change from a leaf to a fish?

She ran a pale grey fingertip down the dark steel of the foil.


Read the conclusion here.

Thursday, October 25, 2012

Gwilminawyn pt 2

What the heck is this? Read part one :)

The shadow and sun alternated as the morning chased away the last remnants of yesterday’s rain shower.

“Like this,”  coached Gwilminawyn, speaking human once again. For that is what the small child turned out to be, a little human girl. Gwilminawyn ran her finger gently over the strings of her toy harp in a murmuring cascade of tinny notes.  “Now you try.”

But the girl only stood and stared, keeping one short, and to Gwilminawyn’s eyes, stocky arm wrapped around Galanian’s elbow. Gwilminawyn stared back, marveling anew at how round the eyes, the face, the ears all were; how red and short curly the hair was; how mottled the skin looked. Freckles, her mother had called them.  And they were normal, for a human at least.

Gwilminawyn sat down near the child and held her harp where the girl could reach it. “Like this,” she said, and ran her own slender grey finger along the strings again.

“Don’t push her, Gwilminawyn,” her mother cautioned. “It’s enough that she sat and ate with us. She’ll play with you when she’s ready.”

“I’m not pushing her. I’ll just sit here still and quiet and hold my harp for her. It’ll be like holding nuts for the chipmunks in the garden.”

*****

Once again Gwilminawyn sat on the floor of her family’s front room. The thick rug had been unrolled and served as a soft surface to play on. Gwilminawyn had her doll, Sarananae, and her plush floppy ear bunny and her little wooden dishes on the rug near her. Also sitting on the rug was the small human girl wearing Gwilminawyn’s tunic as a short dress. In two days, she still hadn’t spoken, so the elves did not know her name, but she was playing a little now. While Uncle Galanian had to remain in the same room with her, she had become comfortable enough to venture a few feet from him.

“What. Do.  You. Think? Which. Dress. Shall. The doll. Wear? The blue dress? Or…. the white dress?”

A short pudgy finger touched the white dress.

“The white dress? It is good. Let us. Get. The doll. Ready for tea.”  Gwilminawyn had no idea why humans would need to change their clothes before drinking tea, but Uncle Galanian had assured her that he had watched a group of human girls engage in just this sort of pretend play.

“She is making progress, Galanian,” Gwilminawyn’s father observed from the doorway. “Though, I am still not sure why you brought her here. Would she not be better with her own people?”

“I tried, Thurvial. I tried, but…..here, let me start from the beginning. Perhaps then you will understand how I could not…. Let me start from the beginning.”

A little hand grasped the blue dress and laid it on the head of the stuffed bunny.

“I do not think. Rabbit. .. will go.. into.. the blue dress.”

In answer, the hand patted the dress and the rabbit twice, insisting.

“It is good. We shall. Try. The rabbit is… bigger… than… the dress. But.. we shall try.”


“I came across the remains of another village. The orcs have been particularly brutal in their raids against the human frontier. The humans had taken to clustering their homes together for protection, but a dirt embankment around a group of twenty to fifty small hovels is little defense against a orc raiding party. There is often little left. They have little enough to begin with, and the orcs just leave a cluster of smoldering heaps when they go through. I always make a search for survivors, but what I usually find--“

Gwilminawyn ducked her gaze back down to the dress tangled around a set of felt ears. Too late, her uncle had already noticed her eyes on him as she was listening to the tale.

Her uncle cleared his throat. “This time,” he continued, “the little girl was the only one I found alive. I made a sweep of the area, looking to see if any others had fled and hidden nearby. But I found no one else.  I traveled with the child for several days before I came to a properly walled town where I thought it safe enough to leave her.”

“The Rabbit wears the dress. The dress will not….. close. But… the rabbit wears the dress. Is it good?”

“And then, where should I leave her? With whom could I entrust her? She still had not spoken, no matter how I coached her. I began to wonder if she could speak. That made the choice of how to place her even more difficult. Which family could I trust to raise an orphaned, traumatized, perhaps mute child as carefully as they would their own? I spent several more days in the town, calling upon a few of the families there. When at last I had made my choice, the child had to be pried from my arms and given to the woman that would, I hoped, be her new mother.  And then, for the first time, she made a sound. She started crying so piteously, not loudly, just the barest, heartbreaking weeps. I turned to leave, but if I had walked out on that sound, it would have haunted me forever. I took her back. What else could I do? We had both seen too much, been through too much. What else could I do?”

In the quiet that followed her uncle’s question, Gwilminawyn lowered her voice to a whisper. “Rabbit sits here. Doll sits here. I sit here. You sit there. Here is a cup… for the rabbit. Here is a cup for the doll. Here is a cup for you.  Here is a cup for me.” 

*****

 “We cannot call her ‘Little One’ indefinitely.”

“Of course not, Galanian. But you have been spending too much time around the short-lived humans if you think a few fortnights an ‘indefinite’ period of time.”

“You tease me, as usual, sister of mine.”

“Of course I do. She speaks now, give her more time.”

“She speaks only to Gwilminawyn.”

“But she does speak.”

Under the blanket draped table, Gwilminawyn paused when she heard her name. But the adult conversation seemed nothing new.  “Can you find your nose? Good! Can you say nose?”

“Nose!”

“Right! That is your nose!”

*****

Gwilaminawyn held the book carefully, balancing it on her lap, cradling the spine in one hand and not letting either cover fall completely open….just as she had been taught. It was awkward to do since the book was so large, but being considered mature enough to enter the library unsupervised was a privilege, and not one which she wanted to lose through carelessness. She scanned through the pages of history.

“Hel-eh-wi-sa”, she sounded out. She looked up to study Little One who sat playing with lengths of ribbons. “No.”

She turned a few pages and tried again. “Maz-a-lin-a.”

Little One showed no interest.

“Sarah.”

“Doll!”

“Oh, yes, the doll is named Sarah.” Sweet Sarananae  surely wouldn’t mind having a human name as well. Gwilminawyn turned more pages.

“Ev-eh-lyn.”

“Ev!”

Gwilminawyn gently put the book down. “Evelyn,” she said again.

“Ev!”

“My name is Gwilminawyn. What is your name?”

“Min!”

“No, your name is not Min. My name is Gwilminawyn.  Is your name Evelyn?”

“Ev!”

“You say Ev-eh-lyn.”


“Ehv-L.”


Gwilminawyn smiled.

*****

(Go to part 3.... )

Gwilminawyn, pt 1

(I have a 12 page document I want to share, that's a little long for one post. Instead, I'm going to share it in 4-6 parts. I'll post one or two parts per day to keep it easy to read--I hope!)

It still needs some editing and rewriting, but I need some feedback on it to know *what* to rewrite and *how* to rewrite it. I've already identified a few things that need tweaked, but I'm still not quite sure how to tweak them. All this to say, please leave comments, either here or on Facebook. I'd really appreciate  some specific critiques. 

This isn't for anything in particular. Essentially, this is just a character history, but its turned into an interesting writing exercise for me. 

Thanks so much!)

The silence was not complete.

Outside, the wind still wound its way through the piney boughs. Scattered bird calls punctuated the late morning and the occasional chipmunk chattered. Silvered notes of wind chimes kissed every current of the air. Outside, the mountains breathed their melody with stately grace.

All these lovely sounds traveled easily through the arched stone of the tall windows where inside, four elves sat in stillness and silence.  Their loss was yet too new for words or sounds.
It seemed impossible that she was gone so soon, so suddenly.

Gradually, Gwilminawyn became aware of a new noise in the room. A few soft sobs slipped into their sorrow. No sooner did she hear them, than she realized they were her own.
How could she be gone?

Gwilminawyn pulled her shaky breath back in, felt her mother’s gentle fingers slide through her hair. The young Gwilminawyn, seated on a floor cushion at her parents’ feet, leaned against her mother’s legs and rested her head against her mother. She took a deep breath and let herself slip into an elven reverie as she delved into her memories of Evelyn.

*****

Only the slightest pause separated the soft rapping from the turning of the door handle. Gwilminawyn and her mother looked up from where they sat on the floor drawing the flower blossoms  scattered on the smooth stone around them. Gwilminawyn sprawled on her stomach, and just as much colored chalk had made it to her fingers as did her paper, but she was quite pleased with her efforts, as all young artists often are.  The visitor surprised her, not that someone would come calling, but that someone would let themselves in without waiting for a response.

The door swung open and a man stepped in and wiped his wet feet on the small rug. His hood was pulled up and hung low over his face to keep off the rain...the same rain which kept the ladies drawing their flowers indoors rather than out. The man turned and closed the door behind him, but something about his movements struck Gwilminawyn as awkward. It was then she realized that in one arm the man carried a bundle under his cloak. 

In one smooth movement, her mother rose to her feet. Gwilminawyn, who had never known any danger, remained interested, but unalarmed, on the floor. 

“Eruarwen,” the man said. “I did not mean to startle you.” Using his one free hand to pull back the hood of his cloak, he added, “Surely, I have not been gone so long that my own sister fails to recognize me?”

“Galanian!”

Gwilminawyn could hear the excitement in her mother’s voice and found herself smiling and standing as well. Uncle Galanian had come home at last.

Eruarwen nimbly stepped over the flowers and the pads of paper to greet her brother, but drew back from his embrace as soon as the first kiss of greeting had been exchanged. Gwilminawyn,  close behind her mother, stopped short, wondering what was wrong.

“What have you there, brother of mine?”

Galanian took a deep breath and gently opened his cloak. In human, he said aloud,  “It’s all right, Little One. See, this is my family, which I told you about.

Gwilminawyn, even after stepping around her mother to get a better view, did not at first understand what she was seeing.  Her uncle seemed to be holding nothing more than a bundle of coarse fabric. Neither did his words make any sense to her. Why switch to a different language than their own beautiful elven? And, though Gwilminawyn was diligent in her studies, she must be translating her uncle’s words in correctly, or why would he be introducing Gwilminawyn to her own mother?

When the coarse bundle moved on its own, Gwilminawyn gasped and jumped back.

“Little One,”  her uncle still spoke in human, and now Gwilminawyn realized he was speaking to the bundle,  “will you let my sister see you?”

The top part of the bundle shook its head no. Gwilminawyn crept closer and found a little foot protruding from the bottom of the bundle, and a little arm coming out the side of the bundle, with a tiny little fist clinging to her uncle’s tunic.

“Oh!” gasped Gwilminawyn, “It’s pink!” Instantly she clamped her mouth shut, realizing she had spoken in haste, and was likely very rude. She looked up at her mother, regret on her face, and received her mother’s gentle nod of pardon.

Her uncle, in turn, chuckled. “Little One, look, there is another little girl here too. She wants to say hello to you.”

On cue, Gwilminawyn, in what she hoped was good human, said, “Hello. My friend. My name is. Gwilminawyn. What is your name?”  Yet the bundle didn’t turn its face away from where it was buried on her uncle’s chest.

“Nevermind, Galanian,”  said her mother, also now speaking in human,  “the little dear is cold and wet and frightened. Introductions can wait. Let’s get your wet cloak off and some warm tea served.  Little One will meet us in time.”

*****

Go to part two.

Thursday, June 28, 2012

Rewrite of Gwilminawyn

Despite my perception that rewrites are supposed to get shorter, this one seems to be getting longer, much longer. But, I hope it is also a little more interesting. More like reading a short story and less like reading a long, boring, and overly verbose, history.


The silence was not complete.

Outside, the wind still wound its way through the piney broughs. Scattered bird calls punctuated the early afternoon and the occasional chipmunk chattered. Silvered notes of wind chimes kissed every current of the air. Outside, the mountains breathed their melody with stately grace.

All these lovely sounds traveled easily through the arched stone of the tall windows where inside, four elves sat in stillness and silence.  Their loss was yet too new for words or sounds.

It seemed impossible that she was gone so soon, so suddenly.

Gradually, Gwilminawyn became aware of a new noise in the room. A few soft sobs slipped into their sorrow. No sooner did she hear them, than she realized they were her own.

How could she be gone?

Gwilminawyn pulled her shaky breath back in, felt her mother’s gentle fingers slide through her hair. The young Gwilminawyn, seated on a floor cushion at her parents’ feet, leaned against her mother’s legs and rested her head against her mother. She took a deep breath and let herself slip into an elven reverie as she delved into her memories of Evelyn.
---

Only the slightest pause separated the soft, rapping from the turning of the door handle. Gwilminawyn and her mother looked up from where they sat on the floor drawing flowers. Blossoms were scattered on the smooth stone floor where the mother and child sat drawing. Gwilminawyn sprawled on her stomach, and just as much colored chalk had made it to her fingers as did her paper, but she, as all young artists often are, was quite pleased with her efforts.  The interruption surprised her, not that someone would come calling, but that someone would let themselves in without waiting for a response.

As the door swung open and a man in dark grey cloak stepped in and wiped his wet feet on the small rug. The hood of his cloak was pulled up and hung low over his face to keep off the rain...the same rain which kept the ladies drawing their flowers indoors rather than out. The man turned and closed the door behind him, but something about his movements struck Gwilminawyn as awkward. It was then she realized in one arm, the man carried a bundle under his cloak. 
In one smooth movement, her mother rose to her feet. Gwilminawyn, who had never known any danger, remained interested, but unalarmed on the floor. 

“Eruarwen,” the man said. “I did not mean to startle you.” Using his one free hand to pull back the hood of his cloak, he added, “Surely, I have not been gone so long that my own sister fails to recognize me?”

“Galanian!”

Gwilminawyn could hear the excitement in her mother’s voice and found herself smiling and standing as well. Uncle Galanian had come home at last.

Eruarwen nimbly stepped over the flowers and the pads of paper to greet her brother, but drew back from his embrace as soon as the first kiss of greeting had been exchanged. Gwilminawyn, close behind her mother, stopped short, wondering what was wrong.

“What have you there, brother of mine?”

Galanian took a deep breath and gently opened his cloak. In human, he said aloud, “It’s all right, Little One. See, this is my family, which I told you about.”

Gwilminawyn, even after stepping around her mother to get a better view, did not at first understand what she was seeing.  Her uncle seemed to be holding nothing more than a bundle of coarse fabric. Neither did his words make any sense to her. Why switch to a different language than their own beautiful elven? And, though Gwilminawyn was diligent in her studies, she must be translating her uncle’s words in correctly, or why would he be introducing Gwilminawyn to her own mother?

When the coarse bundle moved on its own, Gwilminawyn gasped and jumped back.
“Little One,” her uncle still spoke in human, and now Gwilminawyn realized he was speaking to the bundle, “will you let my sister see you?”

The top part of the bundle shook its head no. Gwilminawyn crept closer and found a little foot protruding from the bottom of the bundle, and a little arm coming out the side of the bundle, with a tiny little fist clinging to her uncle’s tunic.

“Oh!” gasped Gwilminawyn, “It’s pink!” Instantly she clamped her mouth shut, realizing she had spoken in haste, and was likely very rude. She looked up at her mother, regret on her face, and received her mother’s gentle nod of pardon.

Her uncle chuckled. “Little One, look, there is another little girl here too. She wants to say hello to you.”

On cue, Gwilminawyn, in what she hoped was good human, said, “Hello, my friend. My name is Gwilminawyn. What’s your name?” But still, the bundle didn’t move or turn its face away from where it was buried on her uncle’s chest.

“Nevermind, Galanian,” said her mother, also now speaking in human, “the little dear is cold and wet and frightened. Introductions can wait. Let’s get your wet cloak off and some warm tea served.  Little One will meet us in time.”

Friday, December 31, 2010

Blog Year in Review 2010

The first sentence from the first post for each month of 2010.

January
Forty-five minutes after the ball has dropped, Toa of Boy and Mama are in bed.

February
Yes, it's that time again. [This, incidentally, was about needing help with an algebra problem. Not about some other "that time", in case there was any confusion there.]

March
Despite the fact that my sister and I hold differing political views, differing religious views, and different tastes in clothes, fashion, and food, I love my relationship with my sister for the following reasons.

April
We got word Thursday night that my brother's house, in East Nowhere, Ohio, burnt to the ground.

May
Toa of Boy wants a Pokemon Party for his birthday this year.

June
This post is a result of a conversation I had in my church hallway with my Signing Friend.

July
yes. It's Thursday, not Friday.

August
So far today I have:
Got caught up in my Bible in 90 days reading. This shall be celebrated with chocolate.

September
On Tuesday, I walked upstairs after lunch to match up my coupons with my grocery list.

October
Confession time, we actually finished up our unit on Canada last week BUT my small group at church was doing a media fast, so no blog for me.

November

I love homeschooling.

December
The Up--Sweetling and Toa of Boy were finishing adding the eastern European countries to their maps of Europe.

Want to play along? It's fun and easy. Make a blog post or a facebook note using the first sentence of either the first post of your blog for each month OR the first facebook update for each month. If you can, leave a comment back with me so that I can come and read your note/blog post.

Happy New Year!

Thursday, December 09, 2010

Personal Proverbs 31

  • A wife with a gentle and sincere heart seems to be a rarity in today's society.
  • She is worth far more than those multi-karat diamond rings which commercials claim are the measurement of love.
  • Her husband can trust in her basic goodness, knowing that her words are rarely cutting and that her actions are intended for the benefit of her family. His life is enriched by her presence.
  • She is good and kind towards him, daily demonstrating her respect and confidence in his character and his abilities through her words and attitudes. She avoids sarcasm, criticism, and demeaning "teasing". Neither does she second-guess his choices or go behind his back on decisions.
  • Her life can easily be overloaded with activities and commitments, so she is careful what she agrees to and chooses wisely her involvements, praying about her decisions and constantly seeking only God's best for her and her family.
  • She plans healthy meals and snacks, and is frugal and discerning in her grocery shopping.
  • She avoids sleeping in, even though she could, but is instead intentional about getting up and utilizing her morning wisely. By doing so, she helps her family begin each of their days well, in peace and in health.
  • She is not frivolous in her spending, but deliberate and conscientious. She seeks to increase the family's purchasing power, not squander it away.
  • She is enthusiastic and motivated about her role and her calling, finding fulfillment and energy in the good works God has prepared in advance just for her. She is healthy, taking time to exercise and care for herself physically, because she knows her own welfare is very important.
  • She makes sure that the tasks she engages in are productive ones. She does not waste away her days on worthless diversions, nor does she let business keep her distracted from what is truly meaningful. Instead, she regularly reflects on and assesses how she is spending herself and keeps herself from getting burned out.
  • She knows the value of the gifts and talents God has given her, and she puts them to good use.
  • She is compassionate and actively seeks out ways to help those in need.
  • She is prepared in advance for both the immediate future and for the occasional contingency. Her household rarely needs to franticly scramble to get ready for an event, nor does a minor unplanned circumstance throw her life into a tailspin.
  • She takes care to outfit her home usefully and beautifully. She clothes herself tastefully and attractively.
  • The confidence her husband finds at home carries into his public and work life and he can become the man God created him to be.
  • Her efforts do not only benefit her family, but to her credit, they carry over to bless and benefit others as well.
  • She is confident, calm, and full of grace. She maintains a positive, joyful attitude even in the face of uncertainty.
  • She thinks before she speaks, guarding her tongue against malice, nagging, gossip, and ceaseless prattle. Instead, she desires her words to bring comfort, help, and encouragement to all those she interacts with.
  • She is involved with and knowledgeable about the activities and interests of her family members. She keeps track of schedules and appointments and special occasions. She is not passive about life, but engaged and pro-active.
  • Her children are well-behaved, polite, and considerate, learning good character traits from their rich home-life. When they are grown, they not only have many fond memories of their childhood, they tell others of the lessons and the values they learned from those experiences.
  • Her husband treats her as the priceless treasure which she is. She receives and recognizes his unique expressions of love.
  • Our society has turned womanhood into a House of Mirrors, and the images and perceptions of women presented by our world today are false and distorted. A woman's worth is not based on income, material possessions, a high-profile career, or conforming to an impossible appearance standard. No, a woman's true worth is found in her inner character, in her ability to love and do and give to others, in her spirit, in her preciousness in the eyes of God, and in the originality of the artful masterpiece she was created to be to the world.
P.S.--I can't honestly say that I have completely arrived at this. But this is what my heart desires.

Monday, September 20, 2010

Happy Birthday Vaya!

I have been composing a special birthday song just for you in my head since 7 this morning. But, because I love you very very much, I did not call you at 7:30 to sing it to you....even though doing so was very very tempting. Instead, I decided to post it on your Facebook page where all your friends and family can enjoy it too. See, I'm thoughtful that way. (I am, obviously, also posting this on my blog, since I'm way too pleased with myself. Sweetling co-authored this song, though I'm not sure how much she wants to admit to such a thing. She would also like to point out, and in fact did point out, that technically Vaya is not halfway to thirty. Halfway to thirty is fifteen. To which Mommy replies, math shmath.) 

 
We wish you a Happy Birthday,
We wish you a Happy Birthday,
We wish you a Happy Birthday,
Let's sing it again....

You're halfway to thirty,
You're halfway to thirty,
And when you ARE thirty,
I will sing this again!

Let's have chocolate at your party,
Let's have chocolate at your party,
Let's have chocolate at your party,
Again and again!

What do you mean I'm not invited?
What do you mean I'm not invited?
What do you mean I'm not invited?
You are grounded again.

If you visit me, I'll make chocolate,
If you visit me, I'll make chocolate,
And we can snuggle Peach Boy
Again and again!

We wish you a Happy Birthday,
We wish you a Happy Birthday,
We wish you a Happy Birthday,
And this is The End!

Sunday, July 04, 2010

Independence Day Reading

I originally arranged these quotes for a July 4th reading at our church several years ago. The selections are meant to be read aloud, by three different speakers. One speaker always reads the historical quotes, one reads the scriptures, and the third speaker gives the references for both the quotes and the scripture passages. I'll show the different speakers here through different font colors.

The Word became flesh and made his dwelling among us. We have seen his glory, the glory of the One and Only, who came from the Father, full of grace and truth.

 John 1:14

[Jesus said] I tell you the truth, whoever hears my word and believes him who sent me has eternal life and will not be condemned; he has crossed over from death to life.

-- John 5:24

Jesus answered, "I am the way and the truth and the life. No one comes to the Father except through me.

--John 14:6


We hold these truths

This is what we speak, not in words taught us by human wisdom but in words taught by the Spirit, expressing spiritual truths in spiritual words.

-- 1 Corinthians 2:13

 To be self-evident


 since the creation of the world God's invisible qualities—his eternal power and divine nature—have been clearly seen, being understood from what has been made, so that men are without excuse.

--Romans 1:20

That all men are created

God created man in his own image, in the image of God he created him; male and female he created them

-- Genesis 1:27

Equal

There is neither Jew nor Greek, slave nor free, male nor female, for you are all one in Christ Jesus.

--Galatians 3:28

And are endowed by their Creator

 Have we not all one Father? Did not one God create us? Why do we profane the covenant of our fathers by breaking faith with one another?

-- Malachi 2:10

With certain inalienable rights

What will I do when God confronts me? What will I answer when called to account? Did not he who made me in the womb make them? Did not the same one form us both within our mothers?

-- Job 31:14-15

That among these are life

 I have come that they may have life, and that they may have it more abundantly.

-- John 11:25

 Liberty

Then you will know the truth, and the truth will set you free.

-- John 8:32

 And the pursuit of happiness

 I have learned to be content whatever the circumstances. I know what it is to be in need, and I know what it is to have plenty. I have learned the secret of being content in any and every situation, whether well fed or hungry, whether living in plenty or in want.

-- Philippians 4:11-12

 The general principles on which the fathers achieved independence were...the general principles of Christianity

-- John Adams

 There is no authority except that which God has established. The authorities that exist have been established by God.

-- Romans 13:1

 If a sparrow cannot fall to the ground without his notice, is it probable that an empire can rise without his aid?

-- Benjamin Franklin

 But if serving the LORD seems undesirable to you, then choose for yourselves this day whom you will serve, whether the gods your forefathers served beyond the River, or the gods of the Amorites, in whose land you are living. But as for me and my household, we will serve the LORD.

-- Joshua 24:15

Sir, I am not at all concerned [whether God is on our side], for I know the Lord is always on the side of the right. But it is my constant anxiety and prayer that I and this nation should be on the Lord's side.

-- Abraham Lincoln

 In my inner being I delight in God's law; but I see another law at work in the members of my body, waging war against the law of my mind and making me a prisoner of the law of sin at work within my members. What a wretched man I am! Who will rescue me from this body of death? Thanks be to God—through Jesus Christ our Lord!

-- Romans 7:22-25

 We have no government armed with power capable of contending with human passions unbridled by morality and religion. Our constitution was made only for a moral and a religious people. It is wholly inadequate to the government of any other.

-- John Adams

 This day I call heaven and earth as witnesses against you that I have set before you life and death, blessings and curses. Now choose life, so that you and your children may live and that you may love the LORD your God, listen to his voice, and hold fast to him. For the LORD is your life, and he will give you many years in the land he swore to give to your fathers, Abraham, Isaac and Jacob.

-- Deuteronomy 30:19-20

Can the liberties of a nation be thought secure when we have removed their only firm basis--a conviction in the minds of the people that these liberties are the gift of God? That they are not to be violated but with his wrath? Indeed I tremble for my country when I reflect that God is just: that his justice cannot sleep forever.

--Thomas Jefferson

 God bless America!

America, bless God!

Wednesday, May 26, 2010

Coming Soon....

These are the things I'm thinking about blogging about. Yes, that's how lame this post is. It isn't about anything in and of itself, its just about something that might be about something at some point in the future.

First of all though, a little girl whom has been on the hearts of my family and in our prayers just received a new heart last night. They did the transplant overnight. I can't imagine what a long night that must have been for the mother. The little girl went through the proceedure well, and is now in recovery. I can't write about anything else without getting that news out first. It will still be several weeks before they are sure that her body will accept the new heart.

With that said, I shall move on to far less critical issues.

Here are somethings I'd like to blog about. I'm just listing them out here, and organizing my thoughts

--I'd like to start a Making Memories blog meme for the summer. If I get my act in gear, I can launch it in the upcoming Homeschool Showcase over on Wierd, Unsocialized Homeschoolers. The deadline is May 30. (Hear that, self? Deadline.)

--I have a bunch of pictures of a pinata in various stages of completion awaiting a "how to make a pinata" post.

--I am perhaps crazy for the amount of work I put into the birthday parties for my kids, especially since I have two birthdays back to back. Further thoughts may or may not be forthcoming.

--I have an idea for how to regulate the amount of video games and screentime my kids engage in over the summer. Will it work? Who knows. Its another one of my brilliant ideas. Either it'll be a smashing success or a crash and burn failure. I never seem to have mediocre ideas.

--I have my own take on the Proverbs 31 woman, specially rewritten for a homeschooling mom. Or at least or me.

That's just five things. Not bad. Typity type. Typity type.

Ah, look, here's a Linky test. Could some kind soul help me test by posting a link to any family friendly blog post?

Thursday, January 28, 2010

Co-op Lunch Room

Most boring blog entry ever. Seriously, don't read it.

I'm writing because I'm forcing myself to write. I don't have any motivation, I don't have a topic, but I'm going to write anyway. Why? Because if I have some time to write, and if I decide not to write because I don't have a stellar blog entry, I'll quickly become trapped in perfectionism. Those of you who know me well may at this point be laughing at the thought of me being a perfectionist. And you're right, I'm not a perfectionist. But I am always at risk for being a defeatist. There is always, always the risk of falling prey to the mindset that my efforts/ability isn't very good, so why try? One of the ways that I combat that, at least when it comes to writing, is to give myself permission to write poorly anyway. (And then inflict my poor, rambling writing on the rest of the blogosphere).

Random thoughts--

--I'm sitting in the co-op lunch room. Hence the thrilling title. I'm free fourth period, for now, and I've finished the Bible study I brought to work on, so here I am with some free time and a netbook. Go me and my netbook.

--Toa of Boy tale. Yesterday I called the children into the kitchen to check out how the snow had melted on excatly half of the front lawn, which is on the north side of the house. The shadow of the roof line made a sharp edge of demarcation between the green grass and the white snow. I was just so impressed by the clear difference between the sun and the shade. Toa of Boy's comment, "So, we can go bikeriding?"

--Crazy Love. I'm going to love this book. I watched a video segment on the website "the awe factor of God" and it was, in fact,  awesome. I tried to pull the video segment up on the flatscreen tv in the living room (which is run through a media center pc), but I wasn't quite the techno geek for the task. I'm going to give The Songwriter all sorts of grief next Tuesday for not liking the video segment.

--Sweetling. Sweetling no longer makes apperances in my blog entries and facebook updates because many of her peers are on Facebook. I don't think Sweetling would appreciate her Mommy sharing "cute Sweetling stories" that are visible by the entire church youth group. Still, I feel guitly that I share about Toa and am silent in regards to Sweetling.

--Three pounds. No, this isn't at all like Seven Pounds. Only that between the middle of December and the middle of January, I've gained back three of the four pounds I lost when I spent several weeks carefully counting calories last August and September. Two months to take off four pounds, one month to put almost all of it back on. And yeah, I know three to four pounds isn't a big deal in the grand scheme of things, but darnit, I worked hard to lose those four pounds. I really don't want to go back to knowing how many calories are in two measly peanut M&Ms, so I'm looking into The Belly Fat Cure instead.

--Sewing. I can do it, I don't like it. It's like cleaning....I can do it, I don't like it. I tend to procrastinate any sort of sewing project. I know you are all shocked by this. Yesterday, the Jedi asked me, again, if I could please mend one of our waterbed sheet sets when I got the chance. I realized later that whenever the family needs anything, the Jedi prioritizes the task and gets it done no matter how unpleasant it is, how grueling it is, how frustrating it is, or how tired or stressed he is. None of that matters. What matters is that something needs done, and he does it. I'm ashamed at how immature and selfish I am by comparison.

--Water. The water in the co-op school building tastes yucky. I bring two waterbottle with me to co-op each week. Today, I had drunk both of them by the end of lunch. Now I have no water and I'm thirsty. Ok, no good water.

--Stampede. Co-op is ending. I hear the echoing stampede of feet on the stairs.

Saturday, January 02, 2010

Crabapples in Tupperware

I found a link to this article on To Love, Honor, and Vacuum.

There is the question of why I want to write. I don't have a specific goal in mind. I don't have a burning, driving desire to be a novelist. I don't have a specific story or message that God has laid on my heart to share with others. I just like to write. I have this delusion that I'm occasionally good at it, and I want to practice and hone that ability.

That being said, I didn't write much today. I did read a few blogs. I failed to add The Starr Blog to my list. I accidentally deleted a story thread from my g-mail account. (But Christopher Robin is going to rescue me, cause she has the story thread and is going to resend it to me. After rolling her eyes of course.) And I came up with the oh so clever comparison that if a word aptly spoken is like apples of gold in settings of silver, then my words were more often like crab apples in tupperware. (By the way, Holly, I didn't mean to imply that I only directed my temper tantrums at God. My friends and family members also receive some fall out, though the Jedi gets the hysterical tears part more often than the temper tantrum part of my little emotional meltdowns.)

And now, Toa of Boy is snuggled into bed, so I can't play Zelda. No, that doesn't have anything to do with writing, The "and now" was a topic transition. Anyway, Toa of Boy is my cheerleader, commentator, and advisor while I'm playing Zelda. So, I can't continue on through the Water Temple without him, because the Zelda game has become nearly a team effort. I think I'll go play Sims Racing instead.

Friday, January 01, 2010

Blog Year in Review

Forty-five minutes after the ball has dropped, Toa of Boy and Mama are in bed. Sweetling is on her compter giggling at HomeStar Runner. The Jedi is on his computer searching for a PC version of an old Commadore game. And I'm on my new netbook under my new penguin blanket bloggiing.

This is how this works. For each month of last year, post the first sentence written on your blog for each month. Then post here, and let me know so I can come read too :) I forget whose blog I saw this on first. Maybe tomorrow I'll search and see if I can find it.

January
Why are resolutions yucky?

February
I think I'm supposed to be sharing this Sunday in the women's Bible study.

March
I am thinking... that the Jedi and I have scared three of the youth boys into eternal bachelorhood after last night's class about marriage and communication.

April
I feel like I should start by saying that I'm not at all a Bible scholar.

May
Because I just did math with Honey Bunny.

June
I just need to stop visiting Nora's blog.
 
July
At Weird Unsocialized Homeschoolers, they do a thing called week in review.
 
August
It's August already.

September
I am....sitting at the park.

October
Simple Woman's Daybook....cause I need to get back into blogging.

Novembeer
Toa of Boy likes to look at artwork produced by other young children.

December
Place an X by all the things you've done and remove the X from the ones you have not, then tag your friends (including me).


In other happenings....
New Year's Resolutions
 
1. Read therough the Bible in a year. (I've successfully done this before using The One Year Chronological Bible,)
 
2. Write 250 words a day, except Sundays. Doesn't matter what or where I write. Some of it can be on my blog, some of it can be for Associated Content, some of it can be in a word program. Just write. (Or, alternatively, I can also take a day to revise anything I have written.)

Saturday, December 05, 2009

Research Paper--Special Option

The next unit we will be working on in 6th grade composition is the research paper. Since over half the class wrote a traditional research paper in co-op last year, I wanted to provide a slightly different option for the research paper unit this year. I tried to make it perfectly clear to the class that they were more than welcome to write a standard research paper if they were more comfortable with that. OR, they could take what was behind door number two, and participate in a special assignment.

Here are the basic instructions for this optional alternative to the basic reseach paper.

Imagine if there were a national family magizine hosting a contest open to junior high students. Imagine if the grand prize of the contest was an all expense paid family vacation of your design and choosing plus the opportunity to have your family vacation chronicled and then featured as a major cover story for the magazine. To enter this contest, the stundent must research, plan, and budget a family vacation and submit a written proposal of the vacation's iternerary and budget.

Here is what each student should do, (if they choose to participate in this option):

Research, plan, and budget a family vacation using the following guidelines--

1. The vacation should have a unique theme or approach, something that sets their proposed vacation apart from other entries in the contest. The theme could be historical, educational, scientific, "all-American," or it could pertain to the family's unique past and history (such as tracing the path and places great-great-grandparents lived when first arriving in America.)

2. The vacation may take place anywhere in the 50 U.S. states (including Washington D.C.). Multiple sites may be visited, or the vacation can center around one locale.

3. The vacation must stay within a budget of $2000 per family member. This budget should include all costs of the trip such as lodging; transportation (including gas money roughly calculated by mileage, cost of rental cars if applicable, plane or train tickets if applicable); food (for every meal and snacks for every person); and any additional fees such as admission to museums or parks, or any special supplies or equipment needed to be rented or purchased, such as camping gear, scrapbooks, cameras, etc, if the family does not already possess the specific items needed.

4. The vacation may be as long or as short as desired, provided that the vacation stays within the budget allowed.

5. The student may research destinations, restaurants, costs, etc on the internet and may receive help from a parent or other older person in determining reasonable cost estimates for food and gas. The student may also write to tourism and travel bureaus and request brochures or pamphlets to help them plan the vacation.

Due Dates:

Dec 10 --Have topic for traditional paper chosen, or have vacation theme and some destinations in mind. (Or at least have topic or vacation narrowed down to one or two possibilites). In class we will be learning about finding infomation, bibliography cards, and note taking (Unit 5: lssns 3-5).

Note, if your student chooses to write a traditional paper, lesson 2 should be completed at home.

During Christmas Break--Be doing research on topic or on vacation. Complete all notecards and bibliography cards.

Jan 14 -- Notecards due!!! Bring completed notecards back to co-op. The bulk of reasearch should now be complete! In class we will be learning about making outlines (Unit 5: lssn 8-9).

Jan 21 -- Outilines due! (just one copy is needed) In class we will be covering Unit 5: lssns 10-12

Jan 28 -- Rough draft of introductory paragraph(s) are due. Just one copy is needed and can be shared aloud with the class. In class we will cover Unit 5: lssns 13-16.

Feb 4--Research Reports Due! Please bring 10 hole-punched copies of the final report to be shared with the class.

Format for the Vacation Proposal

If your student chooses to research and plan a vacation instead of completing a standard research paper, the final paper would look something like this:




Snappy Title of Vacation



The first few paragraphs of the vacation proposal will be introductory paragraphs. These paragraphs will include a hook to grab the readers attention, an brief description of where the student plans to go on vacation, and an explanation of why this vacation was chosen and what makes this vacation unique.


Day One


A brief description of day one, which should start with leaving the home. Include where the family will be stopping to eat, or a menu if a picnic lunch and dinner are packed for traveling. Under the description will be a list, with or without bullet points, for the costs of each stop during day one. Include any weblinks where applicable If the family is traveling in the family car, it might look like so:

  • Gas: $x for the day. Car gets n miles per gallon and we will be traveling y miles in the first day.
  • Lunch: $x total, with $z per family member at McDonald's or other fast food off  highway exit.
  • Snacks: $x total: Pillsbury cookies baked ahead of time and apple slices.
  • Dinner: $x total, with $z per family member at Mia Pizza Ria in City, State. www.miapizza.com
  • Lodging: $0 We are staying with Aunt Pat, who lives in City, State and visiting with our cousins since they are on our way to our final destination.



Day Two

Here will be a brief overview of the vacation day two. A description of any stops the family will be making and why those stops have been chosen should go in here. Again, a cost break down of the day and any relevant weblinks should be included. Like so

  • Breakfast: $0 We will be having breakfast at Aunt Pat's.
  • Gas: $x for the day. Car gets n miles per gallon and we will be traveling y miles in the second day.
  • Lunch: $ ....
  • State Park/National Monument/Museum/Zoo: $x total, with admission at $ per adult and $ per child. www.website.com

  • Snacks: $ total for $ per person spent at Zoo

  • Dinner: $.....
  • Lodging $ for night stay at Named Hotel.



Day Etc


Follow the same format of a paragraph of description for each day and a cost breakdown for each day.


Back at Home (or whatever you wish to title your conclusion section)


In the concluding paragraph(s) of the proposal, the student should explain what he or she hopes to learn or gain from the experience. Also, think of and describe a way to record what you experienced. Finally, answer the question of why you think these experiences will make a life long impression, or difference, to you. Will a trip like this matter 10, 20, 30 or more years from now?


Tuesday, August 25, 2009

Seven Day Wait

I'm sure there's a name, a catch phrase that I can't remember. Isn't there a certain term for the waiting period between when a person applies to buy a gun and when that person is actually eligible to purchase the gun?

No, I'm not planning on buying a gun. Smurf can start breathing again. Deep breaths, Smurf. In and out. There ya go.

But I do want to start a new project, some new creative outlet. I need some new creative, self-chosen (not externally mandated) project. I think the fact that I was envisioning and composing margarine commercials in my head last night as I made my toast is a pretty fair indicator of this need. The fact that I had to step over multiple laundry baskets to get to the computer to write about my need for a creative outlet is completely irrelevant to the conversation.

Trying to launch a new blog meme is one possibility.

Learning and practicing some photography is another possibility. Check out this description of the 365 project.

Learning something about web design? blog design? to redo my very boring blog page is another possibility....but that involves the evilness of computers, so don't hold your breath on this one.

NaNo is coming up in November but that is NOT a possibility. Hear that Nora? I'm not going to be sucked in this time.

Sketching? Do I really want to get my poor neglected sketchbook back out?

What about my poor, even more neglected, flute?

Being an ENFP, I've learned, well---I've almost learned--- from past mistakes that I should impose a seven day waiting period on myself before I try to commit myself to any new undertaking. If my brain were less mushy, I'd leave you with some clever and witty simile comparing the dangers of guns to "shooting myself in the foot" with a new project. But that lame statement is as close as I'm getting today.